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Xavar

Post by Nocme on Mon May 11, 2015 2:52 am

Animal Name: Xavar

   Location: All over Polemos

   Effects/Uses: Can be tamed to be pets or excellent hunting birds. However many trainers claimed that they are not really tamed. They are just willing to work with other races. There is also a heavy superstition surrounding them to be bad omen, or a signal for bad times ahead - especially the ones with black eyes.

   Description: They are pitch black birds about 59 cm (23 inch). They are black from head to tail, with only their eyes red, with glowing trails of red vapours rising out of the sockets. Some other eye colours are also observed, from purple to black. A few even rarer ones have faint white pattern on their back.

   Behaviour: Differ from bird to bird greatly. Some can be lazy, some can be kind and a few are just aggressive. However the common traits are the fact they are extremely intelligent, enjoy pranks and very independent. They do come in flocks, but most of them prefer to be alone. They do not show any loyalty to their tamer or owner.

Wild ones are mostly feared as they usually come with some sort of calamity. From pack of wild creatures or deadly haze, they are highly immune to most poison so many even stay with the deadly haze until it pass and they take whatever they could. Thus many owners kept them just to strike fear into their enemies while some just avoid the bird like a plague. There is a rumour that the birds can magically attract those beast or deadly poisonous clouds on purpose, however that is yet to be empirically proven.

As they are incredibly smart many suspected they have their own private language, but only a select few knows and learn it.


Last edited by Nocme on Mon Feb 29, 2016 8:26 pm; edited 3 times in total (Reason for editing : Added new info)
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Re: Xavar

Post by Aziel on Thu May 14, 2015 10:03 pm

Howdy Maru! A quick grammar things to clear up and make this read a little bit more simply:

-"They do however come in flocks, but generally if its convenient for them and separate the moment it isn’t. They are not shown to be any loyalty to their tamer or owner, some would happily escape and never be seen again."

^This basically says they can be flocks but prefer to be on their own, correct? "them and seperate" is a little confusing

^Perhaps change "they are not show to be any loyalty" to they do not show any loyalty to their tamer or owner?

-"From pack of wild creatures or deadly haze – they are highly immune to most poison."

^they "they" in this instance is the bird species, correct?

^It then goes to say may kept them to strike fear into their enemies The "many" in this sentence is the owner, correct? If you don't mind, please just distinguish who you're referring to when you combine different nouns! It'll definitely help keep things crisp and simple to understand.

Small confusion aside, it's a really creative creature! A cool take on the modern day crow/raven. Should be accepted when the changed are made! c: Let me know when you've fixed it and i'll approve it. /o/


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Re: Xavar

Post by Nocme on Fri May 15, 2015 8:58 am

All grammar error should be dealt with now
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Re: Xavar

Post by Aziel on Fri May 15, 2015 6:51 pm

approved! C:


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